A Beautiful Mistake

May 22, 2022 | Story Blog | 9 comments

The onset of our fragile bond was blissful, as could be
Oh, our ties seemed a certain divine symphony.

It felt like you were the wind that sails my ship,
The smile to my joy and tears to my weep.

The chorus that adds melody to my song,
Committing each other to take it long.

A beautiful Mistake - Nirav Khanal
A beautiful mistake

You were the sudden spark that lighted me up,
Everything that I ever had dreamed of.

We, as a matching set, had my heart race,
Seemed everything fell perfectly right into the place.

We reached the pinnacle way too soon,
Reality is, you climb down when you conquer the moon.

Over time, the chorus became a tuneless beat,
Time consumed a melody that once made me feel complete.

All I did was keep my promise.
Never did I know; it would root my demise.

As my heart shattered, I felt myself shriek,
What was once beautiful is now A beautiful mistake.

9 Comments

  1. Anonymous

    😢😢😢

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  2. Sarina Joshi

    Nice πŸ‘

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  3. Jawahar Gupta

    here, this is a beautiful rendition It felt like you were the wind that sails my ship, The smile to my joy and tears to my weep. BEAUTIFUL IS ALWAY BEAUTIFUL, MAYBE BEAUTIFUL MISTAKE, Inspiring!

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      • Jawahar Gupta

        you are welcome
        Sada Khush Raho Ji

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  4. PinkFaerie5

    “You were the sudden spark that lighted me up,
    Everything that I ever had dreamed of.” Wow! Marvelous. The ending is sad.

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    • Anonymous

      Nice one nirav ji

      Reply
  5. RolinSton

    In stylistic approach, the overall vibe to the poem is great; including the tonality and imagery.

    The couplets flow well … thoughts and emotions spilling forth like a song.

    Good one !

    Reply
  6. Anonymous

    Nice One Nirav Sir.

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